I have improved my writing a since I have been in this class. It has not been the easiest thing I have done but I have put in the time and I hope to continue to improve. I am fixing errors that I would normally skip without the extra time and help for this class. I still have errors that need to be fixed and simple things that I need to pay more attention to, like comma errors and spaces where there should not be, but I am getting the hang of recognizing my most common mistakes.
One area that I need to work on is the Language use and Mechanics section. I used slang in the first paragraph, I said grad instead of graduate. I still have too many errors on pages, some of which are simple and can be fixed for my next paper. I also need to work on my sentence clarity. I need to elaborate more and explain myslef throughly. Sometimes in my paper I describe something with the littlest explantion of what I am talking about. I need to be specific and get my point across in more depth. It will make my papers more specific and add clarity to them. I still have some punctuation errors, mostly with commas. The more I write and read the easier it is becoming for me to notice where and where not to put a comma.
Another area that I need to work on is the Rhetorical triangle and appeals. I do express all three areas but I could have done a better job at really describing what I was talking about. I should have used more example and visual imagery. I touched every aspect of the triangle but some were more difficult to give examples, and some I should have given more to really get my point across.
When I wrote this paper I started with my thesis. That way I had the main three things that I was planning on talking about. When I wrote my paper I knew what I was going to talk about and then after I had the main ideas I could add aditional quotes and ideas to make the paper more interesting to read. After I added the quotes and the ideas to make my paper interesting, I edited my paper for mistakes. Then I gave it to a few friends to look at and edit.
For my next paper I am going to do my best by trying to have no errors in my paper. I do not want to be marked down for simple things that I can prevent. I really want to improve more areas in my writing and do well in this class.
Monday, February 25, 2008
Monday, February 18, 2008
Allegory & Banking Concept of Education
Learning should be a mutual thing contains a student and a teacher at all times. When there is only one teacher in the school settings it can be boring and dull. For example teacher should also have an open mind and be able to learn from the students as well as being the main teacher, as stated by Freire in The Banking Concepts of Education. To be able to learn means that people should have open eyes, which means that you can learn more by being open to the concept. When people have closed eyes, or closed mind, they tend to learn less than they could have, which was stated by Plato in The Allegory of the Cave.
The "Banking" method states that learning should be a shared thing and that just because someone has a higher status than another does not mean that they are no longer capable of learning from younger individuals. Freire suggests transformation by letting the students think for themselves instead of being forced to memorize everything they are taught. This way students will be able to think for themselves without feeling like they are being disrespectful to the instructor.
There were a lot of ideas that needed some thinking to be able to interpret them. When in the classroom it is important to be able to learn the inforamation but be able to process it and add other ideas to it as well. Sometimes what the professor is teaching lacks creativity and interest, so being able to use the information in your own creative way may help some poeple to remember the material make the information fun for them.
The "Banking" method states that learning should be a shared thing and that just because someone has a higher status than another does not mean that they are no longer capable of learning from younger individuals. Freire suggests transformation by letting the students think for themselves instead of being forced to memorize everything they are taught. This way students will be able to think for themselves without feeling like they are being disrespectful to the instructor.
There were a lot of ideas that needed some thinking to be able to interpret them. When in the classroom it is important to be able to learn the inforamation but be able to process it and add other ideas to it as well. Sometimes what the professor is teaching lacks creativity and interest, so being able to use the information in your own creative way may help some poeple to remember the material make the information fun for them.
Monday, February 11, 2008
Synthesis
The effects of a large company in a small town going out of business can be devastating, as it was demonstrated in Roger and Me. While there are the so called good guys and bad guys they are usually recognizable by society. While some that remain unaffected by being unemployed it shows because they seems to have little sympathy for those that are suffering. While some have reached rock bottom, selling rabbits or living on the streets, while others are willing to spend the night in jail for fun. Some people were forced to leave the town that they lived in to go to different cities and find new work opportunities. Whether it’s being layed-off from GM or a Brokerage the effects are similar in the ways that people’s lives changed.
Crain Communication talked about how many workers lost their job while others either kept the jobs they had, went back to school to study another subject, or simply became unemployed. A culinary school came to the brokerage that had layed of many employees and talked to them about going back to school to study something that would take them farther in life. Some thought it was ridiculous while others thought about the idea. While both situations were similar they had their differences. Each situation handled it differently.
Even though these two stories took place in different places and times they share that when big companies lay off a lot of people it can be depressing. It has a negative effect on the people of that town, and the people have to try and pull them selves out of the hole.
Crain Communication talked about how many workers lost their job while others either kept the jobs they had, went back to school to study another subject, or simply became unemployed. A culinary school came to the brokerage that had layed of many employees and talked to them about going back to school to study something that would take them farther in life. Some thought it was ridiculous while others thought about the idea. While both situations were similar they had their differences. Each situation handled it differently.
Even though these two stories took place in different places and times they share that when big companies lay off a lot of people it can be depressing. It has a negative effect on the people of that town, and the people have to try and pull them selves out of the hole.
Sunday, February 10, 2008
Unemployment
I chose an article that talked about Crain communication that had to do thousands of lay-offs. Many mortgage brokers were layed of and forced to try and find a new job. Some of the men that were being forced to leave were competing against younger less qualified individuals for the same job. Some men tries to learn new languages to seem more qualified for the few jobs that remained. The Institute of Culinary sent letters to the Crain communication to try and get the people that had been layed off the change their areas of interest all together and go back to school. Although some did not agree that going back to school was the right option some chose that path.
Roger and Me was about how GM layed off 30,000 Flint residents. Many of the residents were forced out of their homes and put on the streets with their small children. They went bankrupt and didn’t have any other choice than to find ways to make extra money. Some decided to sell rabbits as meat and pets, some kept their jobs because they were the ones who were suppose to be kicking families on the streets. Some residents lived in their cars and some moved out of state to find new job opportunities. The residents that stayed in Flint tried their best to make Flint a trendy tourist attraction but after spending millions of dollars the town went bankrupt once again.
These two pieces were similar because they both had a negative effect on the people that once worked there. Both companies didn’t seem to care much about the people that had become poor and homeless. Both pieces showed that some people were not able to find new jobs. There were always the ones that stayed back trying to improve what was left over. In the end people took whatever jobs they could find, even if it was for lower pay than before.
"New lives for laid-off bankers; Workers reinvent themselves in hard market; back to school?(Wall Street Report)." Crain's New York Business 24.5 (Feb 4, 2008): 15. General OneFile. Gale. Northern Arizona University-AULC. 10 Feb. 2008.
Roger and Me was about how GM layed off 30,000 Flint residents. Many of the residents were forced out of their homes and put on the streets with their small children. They went bankrupt and didn’t have any other choice than to find ways to make extra money. Some decided to sell rabbits as meat and pets, some kept their jobs because they were the ones who were suppose to be kicking families on the streets. Some residents lived in their cars and some moved out of state to find new job opportunities. The residents that stayed in Flint tried their best to make Flint a trendy tourist attraction but after spending millions of dollars the town went bankrupt once again.
These two pieces were similar because they both had a negative effect on the people that once worked there. Both companies didn’t seem to care much about the people that had become poor and homeless. Both pieces showed that some people were not able to find new jobs. There were always the ones that stayed back trying to improve what was left over. In the end people took whatever jobs they could find, even if it was for lower pay than before.
"New lives for laid-off bankers; Workers reinvent themselves in hard market; back to school?(Wall Street Report)." Crain's New York Business 24.5 (Feb 4, 2008): 15. General OneFile. Gale. Northern Arizona University-AULC. 10 Feb. 2008
Tuesday, February 5, 2008
Roger and Me
After GM closed and layed off thousands of Flint Residents the poeple of Flint built a multi-million dollar mall with an indoor ferris wheel, as well as a Luxury Hyatt hotel that was suppose to attrack more tourists. The people of this town really tried to make it better, by trying to bring in more money.
One things that stood out to me was that when they opened the new jail. The people that still had money left paid one hundred dollars to stay the night in a jail cell, get their finger prints, and their mug shot taken, all that were "souvenirs" to take home. This was an example of logos because they were helping the community by contributing to the poor city of Flint. They were willing to spend the night in a cold, hard cell for the price of one hundred dollars.
One woman killed and sold rabbits to stay alive and make what money she could for being unemployed. She managed to slide by while other were being evicted and thrown on the streets to fend for themselves. People were just doing their job while others were being fired. In certain situations you have to do what is best for you and your family, whether that is killing and selling rabbits or spending the night in jail for fun.
One things that stood out to me was that when they opened the new jail. The people that still had money left paid one hundred dollars to stay the night in a jail cell, get their finger prints, and their mug shot taken, all that were "souvenirs" to take home. This was an example of logos because they were helping the community by contributing to the poor city of Flint. They were willing to spend the night in a cold, hard cell for the price of one hundred dollars.
One woman killed and sold rabbits to stay alive and make what money she could for being unemployed. She managed to slide by while other were being evicted and thrown on the streets to fend for themselves. People were just doing their job while others were being fired. In certain situations you have to do what is best for you and your family, whether that is killing and selling rabbits or spending the night in jail for fun.
Passing Before Lifes Very Eyes
Wolfgang uses pathos in many ways first off he has pictures of this man lying in a hospital hooked up to IV's and monitoring machines. There are differnt pills on the table with water and get well cards and gifts. You also see this mans face as he grows in greater pain throughout a few pictures. This obviously shows emotion for the old man as he is lying in the hospital waiting for the pain to subside and for death to come.
I think the next few pages show him dreaming because he is flying and seeing himself as a young boy. The boy and the old man are talking and to me it seems as if the boy is tring to make the old man more comfortable. The boy says that "a few moments ago our heart stopped, the first "stop" on our road to death." This sounds like he is preparing himself for death. He also states that the rumors about death being painful are not always true. The young boy tells him about how the brain releases different hormones and how sometimes that people see family members or people they cared a lot about before they die. This is all another way to show pathos, by making the man prepared for what is about to come.
Towards the end there are pictures of them flying through the stars and through flowers. There is also a pictures of them flying on a magic carpet, as well as in suits tap dancing on a stage with top hats and canes. These could be things that he has once wanted to do or things that are more comforting. Then there are pictures of him walking a dog and boxing as he asks the young boy " so what do we do know, just sit around and wait for everything to go black?" This is saying that you can not just sit around and wait to have to make everything worth while and life will happen as it needs to.
I think the next few pages show him dreaming because he is flying and seeing himself as a young boy. The boy and the old man are talking and to me it seems as if the boy is tring to make the old man more comfortable. The boy says that "a few moments ago our heart stopped, the first "stop" on our road to death." This sounds like he is preparing himself for death. He also states that the rumors about death being painful are not always true. The young boy tells him about how the brain releases different hormones and how sometimes that people see family members or people they cared a lot about before they die. This is all another way to show pathos, by making the man prepared for what is about to come.
Towards the end there are pictures of them flying through the stars and through flowers. There is also a pictures of them flying on a magic carpet, as well as in suits tap dancing on a stage with top hats and canes. These could be things that he has once wanted to do or things that are more comforting. Then there are pictures of him walking a dog and boxing as he asks the young boy " so what do we do know, just sit around and wait for everything to go black?" This is saying that you can not just sit around and wait to have to make everything worth while and life will happen as it needs to.
Sunday, February 3, 2008
The Southland
"The Southland" was all about the south and how it is much more impressive than the north. The south has the battlefields and how when he is there he feels as if all that life had been wasted. The south never fully recovered from the defeat against the north. It is saying that if you are from the north there is no way that anyone would be able to survive long with all the manners, customs, and landscape that are all different from the north. Miller shows ethos by giving examples that he has personally experienced. He shows pathos by saying that when he stood on the battlefields that he only saw waste of many lives, and how, "The south is still an open, gaping wound." He demonstrates logos by stating that the all the inventions, explorations, and discoveries is a great contribution to human society.
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